Mike Stoll
302 Words
When I live my life today, I
move through the annals of the campus living a normal life. I hang
out with the few - but important - friends that I have here, and
generally appreciate the time that I can use for both education and
recreation.
As I'm sure many can relate to, though, my days never consist of the old friends I had back home. Alex is a double major in Business and Japanese. We used to hang out all the time, and our group would playfully poke fun at him. But he was always a good sport, and we understood he would be since he was probably one of the smartest among all of us. He's in Japan now, studying abroad.
Patrick is a Computer Science major and is a bit of a procrastinator. We would always hang out and play video games, leading the teams, even though he was always a bit lazy and a jokester. He's in New York now, studying diligently and coding every day.
Ned is not far from me- he's only at a different university in Maryland- but the distance feels substantial, and we rarely meet in person. Even without that interaction, I know that Ned still has his same-old 'Who cares!' attitude.
They're all gone now. One in New York, one in Japan, as well as plenty of others that feel just as far away. But when I say gone, I don't mean that they aren't my friends. I return to my room daily and they await me there like the friends that they always have been. Not in person, but digitally; in a way that shows the important of friendship regardless of distance in a way that only the current generation can understand. My friends leave shadows- I can't see them myself, but I know they're there because of the way the light plays off of them.
As I'm sure many can relate to, though, my days never consist of the old friends I had back home. Alex is a double major in Business and Japanese. We used to hang out all the time, and our group would playfully poke fun at him. But he was always a good sport, and we understood he would be since he was probably one of the smartest among all of us. He's in Japan now, studying abroad.
Patrick is a Computer Science major and is a bit of a procrastinator. We would always hang out and play video games, leading the teams, even though he was always a bit lazy and a jokester. He's in New York now, studying diligently and coding every day.
Ned is not far from me- he's only at a different university in Maryland- but the distance feels substantial, and we rarely meet in person. Even without that interaction, I know that Ned still has his same-old 'Who cares!' attitude.
They're all gone now. One in New York, one in Japan, as well as plenty of others that feel just as far away. But when I say gone, I don't mean that they aren't my friends. I return to my room daily and they await me there like the friends that they always have been. Not in person, but digitally; in a way that shows the important of friendship regardless of distance in a way that only the current generation can understand. My friends leave shadows- I can't see them myself, but I know they're there because of the way the light plays off of them.
True friends aren't just the
friends of today- they're the friends that supersede any obstacles.
Mike, as always, I love the diction present in your writing. Your word choice truly brings your personal voice to all that you write, and I cannot wait to hear you read your piece in the digital story. Your pacing--slow and steady--is unchanged throughout your story, effectively highlighting the contemplation present within the writing.
ReplyDeleteOne thing to consider is to create a more defined story board, so as to effectively create a clear beginning, middle, and end. This will emphasize your dramatic question more successfully. Overall, you know I am always a fan of your work. Thank you for sharing!
Hey all,
DeleteThanks for the feedback! I updated the story and I await seeing your new stories on Monday, assuming we keep the same groups. I guess we might not.
Thanks for the advise!
This story made me smile multiple times while reading and you do a great job describing your close friendship with your friends. It's very obvious that although you and your friends have gone separate ways physically, you all remain just as close and in touch with one another, thanks to the internet! Your last line is beautiful and captures the meaning of true friendship so well. I agree with Elizabeth, perhaps your story could be a bit more structured so that it'll have a clear "path" readers can follow. But overall, great job!:)
ReplyDeleteMike, I love the last sentence in your story! It is such a good metaphor (I'm still not sure if that's the right word to use) and I might just have to steal it to sound smart and contemplative some day in conversation. There are a few sentences I'm not sure are necessary in this story, such as the sentence about Ned, because he's not mentioned in the following sentence. Also, I think the first sentence would flow a lot better if you took out the [but important]. I think it's assumed that your friends are important to you. Besides those two, though, I think this is really well done and I can't wait to see how you apply this to the digital story!
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